My thesis was "a young girl named Esperanza struggled with finding who she was, but towards the end of the book, she found her true identity." My strengths in this essay were that I was able to have a lot of concrete details that I can give a lot of information about. My weaknesses in this essay were that had a use of weak vocabulary. Goals that I have for my next essay is to use big words and understand what they mean. I received a 2 on this essay.
My thesis for this essay was that "at the beginning of the book, Brian starts out afraid, ashamed and lonely, but by the end of the book, he starts to mature and find his true identity." I received a 2 minus on this essay because I had an awful amount o9f grammar mistakes. My strengths in this essay were that I was able to provide a balance of quotes from the story and a lot of writing as well. Revision played a not so well role in my final grade because I started to do worse. I think this was mainly because I gave up on myself. Goals that I have for writing next year is to just keep practicing and put a lot of effort into it.
The prompt was what is the main idea of this poem. Something that I noticed about my first writing this year in comparison to my essays now is that they were very weak. The concrete details and my commentary was very repetitive and wasn't as strong as it should have been. Something that I learned is that I have to keep working hard. Something that I am most proud of is the effort I put into it.
The prompt was you had to talk about what can be learned from the Into The Wild Story. My theses was "a young man, Chris McCandless', from a well to do family, gives up everything he has and makes a new life for himself in the wild". I received a 2 on this essay. My strengths were that I used good vocabulary, My weaknesses were that I kept using past tense. Goals that I have for next year are to always use present tense.